citrullus's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Be$pin - O-Bwoy]

The song overall seems a bit repetitious, but the beat is still pretty cool. I would suggest taking out the kick drums that happen at the same time as the synth, and have the kick drum just less frequent. I'm having a bit of a hard time explaining that; listen to Hucci - House Party and how the kick drum doesn't happen with the syllables and it flows a lot better. The song needs more moments to help make less repetition. It's a really good start though.

midimachine responds:

i was going for something along the lines of dopeboy by butch clancy, like a really low slung march. more moments though, i like the sound of that

[Hush]

The intro is too long winded and repetitive. I would consider taking out the first 50 seconds entirely. The track overall is pretty repetitive too. I feel like this experimental tune could be the start of another track, but needs a lot of work as is.
The melody towards the end is pretty cool though and goes with the other layers of the track really well. I think having more melody in the song overall like that might be really cool, along with heavier drums.

ScottJacob responds:

Thanks for the feedback. I think this was meant to be a more atmospheric track, but i get what you mean by saying it needed to get to the point quicker. A lot of my songs tend to be overdrawn especially the intros. I might take another crack at what you suggest though and add more of the melody and concentrate on refining the hooks. Thanks again!

[Joanna Wants To Sleep]

This has some really cool effects! I really get a sense of a nice storyline going with this that's so neat. The beginning I think needs a very little bit of work with the melody. I think that the beat itself that starts around 2:00 is nifty but the sound effects I don't think work with it too well until that 2:30 mark. It starts to get repetitive later on in the track too. Overall I can tell a lot of effort went into this and it's a really unique track.

Daru925 responds:

Hi! Thanks for the feedback, i appreciate.
Yes, it was alot of work (but fun work) especially gathering the in-game voices samples and cleaning them, which i'm not a specialist of.
Glitching the scientist's voice was especially fun :)
I'll pay more attention when integrating sound effects in the future.

[Your Day]

The piano in the beginning is very repetitive, but I think it gets a little better when the piano is finally switched up. The flow of this isn't too good either. I would suggest maybe trying to turn bits and pieces of this into a kind of relaxing bit. I could kind of see this as the start of a background track for some kind of game, but it needs a lot of work. Keep at it!

MockOff responds:

Really, one star? I usually don't complain about reviews but that seems a bit outlandish. Can't trust everyone I suppose

[Beyond The Ether]

The instrumental seems a bit all over the place, but maybe once the lyrics are added it'll be better. You might want to get a brighter sounding instrument for the lead synth of the beat switch up at the 1:27 mark. Try to add some additional sounds and details throughout to make it sound fuller overall. I'd suggest playing around with more quality instruments too if you have access to FL Studio. Overall this instrumental is going in a good direction but I feel that it needs more work.

SoulSecure responds:

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All of your suggestions are things one would only do if they weren't going to add vocals. :\

I'm using FL9.

What in the fuck are you talking about making the lead brighter? I have no idea which instrument you are referring to since there isn't much of a lead melody at that point.

In any case, the instrumental is finished. Just need to add the vocals.

[Dreams and memories]

This is a really good track! I think that the voice seems a little bit out of place just because it sounds a little less smooth compared to the rest of the track. I could totally see this song in an RPG though. What did you make this in?

CeeeX responds:

Thanks for the great feedback.

I used different kinds plugins, but I it's been a while since I made this music track so I forgot some of the names.

The strings are from East West Quantum Leap Symphonic Orchestra ^^

[TWFE FLAME 2]

You have really good flow, but the beatboxing needs to be cleaner and the song needs to be mixed a bit better. Great style though. :)

Tev2nice responds:

Thanks, I didn't make the beat though if I ever get in contact with the owner I'll tell him :)

[Zafrece- Slip Stream(WIP)]

This is a great sounding song :D My only critique on the detail is about the drums coming in around the 34 second mark; I think they should be in a separate layer and a little louder (like the drums get soon afterwards). Those drums starting around the 34 second mark seem like they are in the same layer or envelope as the rest of the song at that point. Good job! :D

Zafrece responds:

Very astute sir. This was an unmixed and unmastered version. I do the mixing and eqing when the song is finished generally. So your assessment of the song is spot on. When the songs are finished i add lower compression slightly. Side chain hertz from 180 down ( depending on song and drum choice ofc) Also the drums are not the loudest part on this version of the song. They are getting flooded down by the other tones in the same hertz range and fighting for volume control. That's all taken care of in the mixing and mastering part when i ever get around to finishing this thing up x-x/. The joys of school however have taken my time from me as of late.
Thanks for the feed and taking time to pick out exactly what was wrong with the song. I enjoy hearing what's wrong rather than whats right much more.

[Athens (Obsideo)]

I thought that beat was really good. At first I was trying to figure out where the beat was going but once the drums came in it seemed to fit. My biggest critique is that the MC's voice seems more like they are talking rather than MC-ing if that makes sense. Like MC-ing I think a lot of times is more like announcing stuff and using more of an announcing voice, which I think would have worked better with this beat. Also the song is only 1:50 long. I do think that the song overall does sound really good, but there are just some details that needed worked out.

Obsideo responds:

Yeah, I've recently been working on my voice when I'm recording and I'm sure I could make it like 100% better right now haha. Thank you for the 5 star rating though!